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Sonnet II: Princess Luna
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A flight in darkness overhead ought not
To bring much joy, and yet I gaze on high.
That single sight has held my nightly thoughts.
Without her there, much poorer is the sky.
Outlined against the stars and moon her form
Is dark on dark, yet dimmer are the lights.
Though moonlight’s beams bring not the sun’s fair warmth,
By moonlight see: How radiant our nights!
Fair Luna, Princess of the Night once more,
In your return, all ponies celebrate!
Night’s silky, gentle, beauty we adore;
Pray bless us with your art, who stargaze late!
We revel, princess! You’ve at last returned!
Again, we’re ruled by both for whom we yearned.
To bring much joy, and yet I gaze on high.
That single sight has held my nightly thoughts.
Without her there, much poorer is the sky.
Outlined against the stars and moon her form
Is dark on dark, yet dimmer are the lights.
Though moonlight’s beams bring not the sun’s fair warmth,
By moonlight see: How radiant our nights!
Fair Luna, Princess of the Night once more,
In your return, all ponies celebrate!
Night’s silky, gentle, beauty we adore;
Pray bless us with your art, who stargaze late!
We revel, princess! You’ve at last returned!
Again, we’re ruled by both for whom we yearned.
So much enjambment, and sonnets are typically end stopped. I'm not super happy with this from a technical perspective, but it IS a sonnet at least. Sonnet I: Rarity was better. I started this sonnet long before Rarity, and abandoned it unfinished at the time, frustrated with iambic pentameter (iambic tetrameter works so much more easily for me...), and made a mistake when I came back to it recently. The mistake was in keeping the first two lines. I liked them, so I kept them, without considering that the enjambment was going to end up dominating the poem, and generally encrapifying it. It's not completely awful, but if Season 4 does something with Luna to make me happy, I may have to give her another poem. This one's not up to snuff.
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